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Post by Ixion7 October 11th 2009, 12:30 am

"I am He Who Shows No Fear because the World Has Shown Nothing to Me. We Are The Two Separated by two Minds, intertwined by One Body"

Epsilon of the Dual Minds HotAnimeGuy8

Name: Epsilon Sarqx
~Nickname: The Dual Minds
Age: 15
Gender: Male
Breed: Human
Alliance: Neither
Ranking: Independent
Warrior Class: Puppeteer, Spellcaster
~Sub-Class: Marionetter, Sage
Elemental Affinity: Ice, Fire
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Homeland: N/A
Physical Description:

Epsilon is very fit for a boy his age and has a thin yet muscular build although not overly muscular. A young boy shrouded in mystery, set aside from the world and its pleasures. A headband covers the eyes of Epsilon, or at least what would be his eyes. Actually, he was unfortunate enough to have a guardian that cared less than nothing about him. He was robbed of his eyes by literally having them pulled out of his eye sockets, leaving him blind at an early age. His face is actually surprisingly smooth for a warrior that has lost the gift of sight, free of scars, wounds, or any remnant of damage. A curse mark in the shape of a bright red cross is remarkably stuck on his left cheek, forever an unseen reminder of the past that he once loathed. Black hair that stops perfectly in line with his forehead sits on his head. Though appearing short from a forward view, Epsilon actually has a long ponytail that hangs just 1 foot below his neck. Overall, the color scheme for Epsilon's clothing is a basic black color with nothing peculiar, special, or too interesting about it. The outfit itself is beyond average. The right sleeve was torn and just hangs limply on Epsilon's arm. The left sleeve is very average like any other sleeve. Not bearing a shirt, Epsilon instead has a long black coat that hangs a little below waist length. Usually, the coat is left open just for the pure sake of comfort to Epsilon. A silver box hangs on the right side of his coat, containing simple items used in battle and used for his puppets. A few capsules also exist within the box for his convenience. On each arm is a symbol representing an element, with the left arm saying Fire and the right arm saying Ice. Hidden on his back is a large symbol, which is actually a seal that holds the two minds together. Half of the symbol is red and the other half is blue. Various holes exist on Epsilon's back which are actually old stab wounds inflicted on him by his guardian.

Personality:

[Decisive][Fearless][Mysterious][Aloof][Passionate][Heartless]

He who is known by no one and by sight knows nothing is the most enigmatic person there is. Epsilon is a person that no one could claim to know. His parents: dead. His guardians: dead. Anyone that knew him: dead. He does his best to remain antisocial and although he uses little effort, he maintains a lack of contact with the people of the world as best as he can. He is very decisive, especially in battle, and does what he can to get the upper hand. Strategic thinking is in his nature, and having a very secluded life away from materialistic things allows him to keep his mind clear and focused. Part of his great thinking skills comes from the two minds that share one body and cooperate with his being in order to enhance his abilities. Overall, Epsilon is very aloof and pretends to not care about what is going on around him. There is no way to explain this and no reason for this. A likely explanation is that he just began to not worry about things since he was treated so badly as a child. Being aloof was the end result. Within the body of the aloof Epsilon is a passionate yet heartless person. The two traits coexist but are seen individually. Each trait comes from the two separate minds within the body of Epsilon that help give him his Ice and Fire elements, his "cold" side and his "hot side". Both sides are remarkable in their own way and they both influence the decision of Epsilon, making him more unpredictable than most. His Passionate side allows him to take pity while the other side is not active, allowing him to save and rescue people on occasion when he sees it fitting. The Heartless side of him is the exact opposite. When this side is active, he doesn't hesitate to kill anyone at all whether they are good or evil or even innocent. None of that matters.

Epsilon's manner of speech is very different from the average person. Because of his two minds within one body, his minds don't necessarily always think within his head. Instead, they sometimes speak out loud with one another as though they are having a conversation. One voice, the more aggressive and dark mind, Armageddon, speaks with a deep whisper that sounds more adultlike while the other voice, Peace, speaks in a more syllabic manner and sounds like a child. Even though the two minds speak to one another on a decision, the choice is always Epsilon's although the two voices do their best to persuade Epsilon, using any piece of information in their arsenal.

The minds, or the spirits that have become minds within Epsilon, create the majority of his person. Having lost nearly all of his memory, save for his ability to use magic and the skill to create puppets even though he can't see them, he is not officially counted as having a mind of his own. Actually, Epsilon is more of a vessel for the two spirits to coexist and take over. Epsilon has enough will to speak and decide things, but the two spirits, Armageddon and Peace, use whatever means possible to influence him. If successful, Epsilon acts more like the spirit that was able to persuade him most, causing him to act. The first time this is seen is when Armageddon convinces Epsilon to kill Sigma. From this, Epsilon acted in the most violent and harsh manner possible, not simply killing Sigma but destroying his body entirely with simultaneously destroying multiple house in the path, possibly killing others. The vessel Epsilon acts as a "tiebreaker" so to speak because he physically performs what the spirit had requested, or demanded depending on the situation. Though unexplained but thought to be a side effect of the merging between Epsilon, Armageddon, and Peace, Epsilon's voice will change either when the two argue, or when Epsilon makes the choice (if choosing to listen to Peace, Epsilon will speak in the same manner as the spirit and his voice may even sound different).

There has been some evidence that a third mind, a true mind, exists within the vessel Epsilon. This has been seen on occasion when the two minds have been heard arguing out loud but a third voice, one that sounds completely different from the other two, makes a choice that is more or less neutral and doesn't agree with Peace or Armageddon one way or the other (see RP Example). Though it does happen, it seldom happens, which is why Epsilon is known better as the Dual Minds.


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History/Background:

[The Beginning]
A midsummer morning like any other. The sun rose in its usual fashion, waking up the sleepy people in the small town. A cry was set off the tiny hospital down the way near the edge of the city that was adjacent to Tenmei Town. At this moment, a child had been born to the loving mother and father Ro Marqx and Al Marqx. The two of them were great warriors, soldiers in the battle that was currently happening. The battle itself was small and didn't concern too much of the country. No one really believed that such a battle, something that couldn't even be considered a war, would harm anyone. "Its time that we send out our ace". A plan from the opposing forces had just been made to wipe out the town near Tenmei. A Faina creature had been manufactered in the lab that is hidden in Tenmei. This beast was believed to be the apocaplyse beast that would bring ruin to the town without a name. The young Epsilon had just been taken home after 5 hours in the hospital and all was well for the moment. The boys shining green eyes and the youthful smile of happiness brought a tear to his mother's eye and warmth to his father's heart. Ring ring. Ring ring. The sound of the telephone blaring from the next room immediately brought tears to young Epsilon's eyes and with the deafening sound making him upset, he closed his eyes and cried like any baby would.

"Excuse me. Is this Al Marqx?"
"Why, yes it is. Who may I ask is speaking?"
"Its me. Zemmy. We have an urgent request to ask of you and Ro. Please...Here me out, its important."
"Just spit it out and tell me what's going! I'm trying to spend time with my newborn son!"
"Well, y'see. Project Apocalypse-Omega has just been confirmed to have gone active. The Faina creature is on its way here from the Tenmei Town Volcano. There has been an estimated time of 7 minutes until its arrival."
"WHAT!! 7 MINUTES!! That leaves us with no time at all! I assume that you want Ro and I to prepare for battle?"
"Actually, yes. We do. You don't much time either. This is the highest level of priority emergency and we need every soldier that we can get out hands on. That means that you cannot deny this request. You or Ro. I'll be seeing you at the interception point in a few minutes."
Ro came running out of the room to the area where the telephone was. In her arms was a cradled Epsilon who had quickly fallen asleep even in the midst of his father arguing over the telephone. His eyes shut tight in his newborn slumber. "What was that about?" Ro whispered to Al about the situation and urgency of the telephone call. Within a few seconds, Al explained what had happened and the two immediately prepared for a battle. Rushing from their house, Al and Ro grabbed Epsilon and a sheet of paper folded up. A bag of clothes, some food, and a small folded up cradle was in the hands of Al. Meanwhile, Ro held Epsilon and stuffed two notes into the shirt pocket of Epsilon. They passed a house on the way that gave off a bad presence. Three knocks on the door. Only three knocks and Epsilon was left in front of the door. He must have been dreaming a great dream of his future because he had a large cute smile on his face.

[The Start of a Horrible Life]
Al and Ro rushed away from the house and their only son. Al whispered to Ro, "it'll be okay", but she seemed to have ignored him. Her head turned around to get a final look at her sleeping son. A tear ran down her cheek. They managed to get to the interception point in under two minutes and stared up high as the gargantuan Apocalypse-Omega beast stood before them walking towards the town at a very slow pace. Al and Ro saw Zemmy but said nothing. Instead, they attacked the beast without hesitation. Within seconds, they were joined by what seemed to be hundreds of other soldiers, all of which were attacking fearlessly and relentlessly. The beast was actually being pushed back but they knew the battle had yet have been completed. They fought hard until the beast appeared to be weakening. A special technique developed by Al and Ro would need to be the finishing blow in order to seal the powerful monster for good. Using Ice and Flame elements, the two soldiers leaped to the head of the monster and used a spell. They managed to destroy the beast from the inside and release from it two spirits that were believed to be the spiritual manifestation of Armageddon and Peace. The beast gave out a tremendous roar that shook the very ground that everyone stood on. Immediately, Epsilon's eyes opened although he didn't cry. He simply stared into the blue sky that seemed to be clear of all trouble. A man stepped out of the house that Epsilon was in front of, not responding to the knocks from earlier, but from the roar that alarmed him. He pulled the baby inside and left the house soon after, rushing in the direction of Al and Ro. A mischievous grin appeared on his face that could only foreshadow bad. Back at the battle, the beast had been stopped but unknown to everyone else, it had not yet been killed. The spirits flew away and had been captured in the sky by the man that had taken Epsilon in his home. "You two will do nicely." He snuck back home

and looked at Epsilon who had fallen back to sleep. He chuckled lightly. "Just a few years and all my dreams will come true". The beast Apocalypse-Omega suddenly began to shake and the soldiers began to retreat. A quiet roar was given off by the beast that almost gave the message: I'm sorry. It suddenly self-destructed killing off a few of the soldiers; killing off Al and Ro.

[A Life of Misery from the Age of 6]
At the age of 6, Epsilon was able to walk, talk, run, and had even taught himself how to make small puppets known as Khronicles. They were small, but intricate and complex nonetheless. He had been living in a home with his Uncle name Stigma. The two of them had never had a close relationship, and during his sixth birthday, Epsilon was officially a sad child. Every year, his bright youthful eyes had started to fade from happiness. It was his present on his very own birthday to get his own room. His room was the dungeon that his Uncle had down in the basement. The smell of blood and the rotting scene of corpses was all there was too it. No bed, windows for sunlight, and hard stone ground. Epsilon tried his best to not let it bother him. Instead, he continued to build Khronicles. He would spend hours or even days at a time on a single Khronicle. He had nothing else better to do; nothing else he could do. He was fed once a day, making him very slim. Everyday was different for him. Stigma was a man that liked to experiment on people. Ordinarily, he would use prisoners from the battle that occurred around 6 years ago, but with the battle now over after Apocaplyse-Epsilon had been destroyed, he couldn't find any other specimens. As years went on, more wounds appeared on Epsilon's back. They were usually stab wounds or needle wounds from drugs that Stigma would force on him that he believed would enhance the power of Epsilon. At some point, one drug had stripped away Epsilon's ability to talk. So many things were taken and given to Epsilon and he could do nothing but accept it. As Epsilon grew older, the torture became worse.

A 7 year old Epsilon made his way to the kitchen to sneak a snack. He was forced to read advanced spellbooks for powerful sorcerors and was required to memorize at least 2 a day or else he would be burned, stabbed, or beat up. Bruises were on the arms and back of Epsilon, but none on his face. He was actually very good at using puppets and spells now seeing as how he had time to practice. Believing that he could sneak a meal, since he was punished a week earlier and told that he couldn't eat for a month, he crept along the walls and used small puppets to scope out the surroundings. He had been caught though and his uncle believed that he would have to punish him with no mercy because of this. For a week straight, Epsilon was tossed in the dungeon, his room, where he could only await his punishment that he believed was worse than any he had previously experienced. As promised, his uncle appeared to him a week later.
"I'm going to tell you a story about your parents and what happened to them." Chains from the walls suddenly surrounded Epsilon and bound him to the wall by his legs, arms, chest, and neck. "A year or so before you were born, I worked as a scientist in Tenmei Town. Our job was to create a superbeing greater than any we had seen before. We wanted to use this being to destroy Sentou Gakuin and from there control the world, but the dream of it existed only as that. We thought for months until we discovered that there were two spirits on this planet that were perfect for what we wanted. These two spirits were the spirits of Armageddon and Peace. Only in unison could these two spirits be utilized. Only in harmony could they exist. I realized that your parents were powerful soldiers that did whatever they could to ruin our plans and I knew that I needed them out of the way. It was then that I realized that a creature could serve as a vessel for the spirits. I placed the spirits in them and sent out rumors that a powerful Faina creature known as Apocalypse-Omega would be attacking this town to wipe it off the map. The plan worked and every soldier took the bait. It just so happens that you were born on the same day that my plan would come to fruition. I had the monster attack and the soldiers defeated it. Somehow, though fortunate for me, your parents knew how to expel the spirits from the creature and that allowed me to re-capture them. It was then that I realized that the spirits wouldn't work well in any creature no matter how powerful it was, but it would instead have to work with a human since humans can, in theory, be more powerful than any individual creature."
"So what happened to my parents?"
"I'm getting to that. Y'see, the creature that the soldiers destroyed had a special ability that we gave it. A mechanism that was attached to the spirits within the body of the creature would set off a reaction that would cause it to self-destruct when the spirits were expelled, whether forcefully, or by nature when the creature was killed. So, as you can probably understand, it was me that killed your parents with my creature."
Epsilon was shaking. He was now blinded by his tears and the only thing on his mind now was pulling himself away from the chains so that he could kill Stigma.
"And now, since you are a disobedient child, I will punish you like I said I would. Your parents wrote some letter about how much they loved you and how much they wanted to me to take care of you. They wrote that they wanted me to make sure that you were protected and that nothing would happen to those perfect eyes of yours. I think that the best punishment for you would be to get rid of those eyes of yours. Then, I want to recreate the experiment that I did with Omega and fuse you with the two spirits."


[Eternal Darkness]
Stigma ran up to Epsilon and his bear hands, nails sharp as a tiger's, he literally ripped Epsilon's eyes out of his sockets. A loud scream sounded through the air that sounded almost as loud as Omega's yell from those many years ago. Stigma grinned at sat on the floor. He slowly closed his eyes and made a chant that couldn't be heard over the sound of Epsilon yelling from the pain. When the chant was complete, Stigma's left hand became blue and the right hand became red. He placed his hands on the arms of Epsilon, causing him to yell even louder and then he placed his hands on his back, which increased the volume of the pain-filled screams tenfold. He then cut him down from the chains and gripped his neck, slamming him against the wall. His left hand began to glow black and he touched Epsilon's forehard. "With this spell, all of your memories will be gone. You will only remember your name and nothing else. You will be my pawn and the new vessel of Armadgeddon and Peace." He let go and Epsilon fell to the floor in complete silence. Without any prior knowledge known to him about life itself, he assumed that pain was something that always existed so he was no longer able to yell from from the pain. The darkness was something that he also now believed to be common.

He stood up and remained still. "Where are my puppets?" Stigma was shocked that Epsilon still knew that much. "Where are they?" Epsilon then heard a voice. Actually, there were two voices within his head. "Kill that man now! He took your life from you and took all that you once knew. You can't allow him to get away with that." The other voice argued with the first. "Don't listen. Spare him. Forgive him. Killing this man won't change anything for you. You've already been stripped of your sight and your memories as well as everything that was already taken from you. Killing this man, your uncle might I add, won't change anything at all." "That's enough, I've made my decision", said Epsilon aloud, head facing the direction of Stigma. "I've decided to kill you for everything that you've done. If its true that you killed my parents and took everything away from me....well, I don't think you deserve to live after that. Actually, I think the best thing for you is to die unless you would like to be tortured by my Khronicles or by my magic." Epsilon held out his left hand. First his hand began to glow red and then a circle of fire appeared. Within the circle appeared the roman numeral for 6 and soon after, the circle of fire took the appearance of a skull. "The fiery inferno is called from the depths of hell to cause havoc and demise on the souls of all who are known as wicked. Set thy soul aflame. Death Spell Arcanus number 6: Hell's Eternity." the skull of flame slowly zigzagged towards Stigma. "WAIT!! This can't be right! HOW COULD YOU LEARN SUCH AN ADVANCED SPELL!!!" The flame grew 50 times its original size and completely discinegrated Stigma as well as the rest of the house that Epsilon's hand was facing and 3 more homes that were in that direction. Strangely enough, a small splash of Stigma's blood managed to escape the full blast and land on Epsilon's cheek, creating a cross shape. Epsilon placed his hand down, realizing that he had destroyed the house and other homes. "I guess I should leave now. There's no need to stick around here. I shall walk the path of darkness and find my destiny...someway."

[On the pathway]
Since that time long ago, Epsilon has actually been looking for a way to control the spirits. In the meantime, he develops complicated puppets and has made a name for himself of being the Dual Minds; a powerful magician that is merely a legend. Few have seen him. Even fewer tell the tale.

RP Sample:

A late night on a warm day. The tranquil sounds shuffled the fall leaves on the ground around the arms and waist of Epsilon. He sighed, unable to truly appreciate the world for its beauty. "I know the world has more to offer than this. More to see. More to experience. I'll never have that." Why won't you? An operation to get new eyes aren't that difficult these days. You could always...take them from someone else. You hold so much destructive power in you. The flames within you would allow you to exterminate anyone with good eyes. Then you could just pop them in. It would be a snap. Inside Epsilon's mind, a flame with bright red demonic eyes and an evil grin was staring at his mind's eye. From the darkness of his inner caverns shone a bright blue spirit that had the appearance of a snowflake. Soft, delicate eyes that seemed to show true sadness yet still express care looked at the mind of Epsilon. Ep-si-lon. Don't you lis-ten to Ar-ma-ged-don. You are unique. Not ma-ny are born with-out eye-sight and not ma-ny can do what you do. E-ven with-out vi-sion, you some-how still have the skill to craft such ar-tis-tic pup-pets. Also, you some-how have still man-aged to mas-ter some of the most di-ffi-cult spells of this world, spells that o-thers would give any-thing to learn. I-sn't that e-nough? "Actually, no. I may be able to build puppets and perform difficult spells, but I'll never be able to see my so called 'art' nor will I be able to do the simple things like read or write. Also, because of my affliction, I can never see the beauty that this world has to offer and I can never learn any other spells unless it is written in braille." In his mind the flame spirit, Armageddon, pushed the ice spirit, Peace, to the side. First, it glared at Peace and then looked at the mind of Epsilon. Just take it. Take what you want. You have the power for it which means you have the means for it. "In the end though....It's my decision. And honestly, I don't want to take anyone's eyes by brutally killing them for no reason. Maybe at some point I'll be able to see the world...but for now, the world shall remain a dark canvas within my imagination."


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Post by Ixion7 October 11th 2009, 1:18 am

This is what I got so far. Comments are always appreciated and any pre-completion critiques are welcome as well.
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Post by Kisuke October 12th 2009, 1:31 am

So far it looks really good. I'm anxious to read the history of this character. I have a feeling that he'll be interesting.
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Post by Ixion7 October 12th 2009, 4:55 pm

Why thank you very much. I'll do my best to make him as interesting as possible.
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Post by Ixion7 October 12th 2009, 7:28 pm

So close to being done.
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Post by Ixion7 October 15th 2009, 11:23 pm

I think i'm done. the RP sample may be a little short.
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Post by Sara October 16th 2009, 4:14 pm

As I am first on the scene I'll take a crack at this, First, this is very very enjoyable to read, so props for that!

I am slightly confused with the Personality. Are you trying to say that Epsilon has almost two different personalities in one body? Are some of them interchangeable or are they all compeltely seperate depending on the mood almost? If they are completely seperate then the characteristics to the personality aren't very clear to which they belong to. Perhaps differentiating using the paragraphs will make it more understandable. It just seems a bit mashed together.

You only mention two aspects of a personality in the main features but make allusions to there being an almost three way thing. The ice and the fire and then a sort of equilibirium, it almost sounds like there is the devil on one shoulder and angel on the other just trying to persuade a person and then you say that they seem to almost take over, but then say it is only persuasive. You make it seem like epsilon has total control and then make it sound as if he isn't in control at all. (by epsilon I mean the mind that is being persuaded.) I'm confused because you say the active half and then say that they can only infulence not directly control a first party. A bit more clarification here would be greatly appreciated as well as trait differentiation.

If another moderator disagrees with me, then I'll take this bit out (Or argue further... I'm like that Epsilon of the Dual Minds Icon_razz)

I really liked your History and background. It exlpains things well, (thouigh i am still confused baout the voices). In your Physical Description you mention that it is a "past that he loathed" But in your background it mentions that this uncle wiped the memories. Did the spell not work or did only some of the memories go? or has he only retained spell knowledge and is soincomplete? Does he emember his parents? Either he loses all of his memory and retains spell knowledge and technique knowledge or could you specify some of the things you've already mentioned as to what he does remember, if the memory is only incomplete. It may not be important for the course of the story, but it will ake your already impressive background a little bit more coherant and consistant.

According to the rules, for higher ranks you need 7 lines, but that is neither here nor there, i think quality counts for more, it could be 7 lines of waffling drivel. Anyway, yours is more than 7 lines and despite not revealing much, it has, for all intent and purpose, good grammar and spelling, as well as being very coherant and creative. So the RP sample is fine by my standards, (Which I think are pretty harsh). It'd be a good opening for a discussion RP or summin, so no worries there.

Sort those few minor picky points and I think you're good to go, unless someone else thinks I am being overly mean. Epsilon of the Dual Minds Icon_razz

As an aside, I am amazed at the care and attention to detail in this! Awesome! Can't wait to see this character RP! You handle the english language like a goodun!
Sara
Sara
Suzaku Elite

Female
Number of posts : 200
Age : 33
Location : Darklands
Occupation : Nothing
Interests : Martial Arts; Music.

The BattleField
Health Points:
Epsilon of the Dual Minds Left_bar_bleue4000/4000Epsilon of the Dual Minds Empty_bar_bleue  (4000/4000)
Tsukara-Skill Points:
Epsilon of the Dual Minds Left_bar_bleue5000/5000Epsilon of the Dual Minds Empty_bar_bleue  (5000/5000)
Experience Points :
Epsilon of the Dual Minds Left_bar_bleue100/100Epsilon of the Dual Minds Empty_bar_bleue  (100/100)

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Post by Ixion7 October 16th 2009, 9:37 pm

Thank you very much. I'm deeply sorry about my character's personality being a bit confusing. I gave another paragraph to explain more and hopefully it should shine some clarity on his personality and the spirits. The RP sample was actually a bit rushed and I couldn't thinkof what I was going to actually RP about. In the future, if anyone RPs me, you'll see more of how the minds work and the way they speak. I did change the RP sample a little though to make it easier to understand.

As for "the past that he loathed part", that was referring more to the past before he lost his memories not so much the part afterwards. He does have some knowledge of his path, although its limited to what the spirits choose to tell him, which means that the overall potential knowledge is based on what they knew about his past. He knows his parents died. He knows he could see in the past (hence the RP Sample about wanting to see). And he knows about him being a magician and good puppeteer although he never forgot how to do it but actually forgot where he learned it from (kind of like him not forgetting how to walk, talk, and breathe because he did it for so long).

Well, I hope that all is cleared and I hope that anyone reading this story enjoys my character as much as I do. I've been itching to finish him but time eludes me. Epsilon of the Dual Minds Suspect

Anyway, here's the new version of it. Hope it passes okay.
Ixion7
Ixion7
Elite Warrior

Male
Number of posts : 105

The BattleField
Health Points:
Epsilon of the Dual Minds Left_bar_bleue4700/4700Epsilon of the Dual Minds Empty_bar_bleue  (4700/4700)
Tsukara-Skill Points:
Epsilon of the Dual Minds Left_bar_bleue3100/3400Epsilon of the Dual Minds Empty_bar_bleue  (3100/3400)
Experience Points :
Epsilon of the Dual Minds Left_bar_bleue0/100Epsilon of the Dual Minds Empty_bar_bleue  (0/100)

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Post by Sara October 17th 2009, 6:41 am

Awesome! That has cleared things up for me!

Well done. I'll approve it, unless anyone else has a problem. (I can't imagine they do)

Sorry if I second guess... This is only the second character that I've ever had a go at. XD I only recently became a character moderator
Sara
Sara
Suzaku Elite

Female
Number of posts : 200
Age : 33
Location : Darklands
Occupation : Nothing
Interests : Martial Arts; Music.

The BattleField
Health Points:
Epsilon of the Dual Minds Left_bar_bleue4000/4000Epsilon of the Dual Minds Empty_bar_bleue  (4000/4000)
Tsukara-Skill Points:
Epsilon of the Dual Minds Left_bar_bleue5000/5000Epsilon of the Dual Minds Empty_bar_bleue  (5000/5000)
Experience Points :
Epsilon of the Dual Minds Left_bar_bleue100/100Epsilon of the Dual Minds Empty_bar_bleue  (100/100)

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Post by Lockheart42 October 17th 2009, 10:21 pm

OMG! This is a really good character. This is probably one of the best characters I've seen on this forum in a while.
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Lockheart42
Rank Yellow Warrior

Female
Number of posts : 246
Age : 31
Location : the center of somewhere
Occupation : You wish I knew that he had your something?
Interests : My interests are interesting

The BattleField
Health Points:
Epsilon of the Dual Minds Left_bar_bleue1800/1800Epsilon of the Dual Minds Empty_bar_bleue  (1800/1800)
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Epsilon of the Dual Minds Left_bar_bleue1300/1300Epsilon of the Dual Minds Empty_bar_bleue  (1300/1300)
Experience Points :
Epsilon of the Dual Minds Left_bar_bleue100/100Epsilon of the Dual Minds Empty_bar_bleue  (100/100)

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Post by Xexame October 18th 2009, 1:29 am

This was obviously a character with a lot of effort put in it.
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Xexame
Elite Warrior

Male
Number of posts : 528
Age : 32
Location : At Dairy Queen of course
Occupation : A Pineapple Dude!!
Interests : uhh....gravy?

The BattleField
Health Points:
Epsilon of the Dual Minds Left_bar_bleue4250/5000Epsilon of the Dual Minds Empty_bar_bleue  (4250/5000)
Tsukara-Skill Points:
Epsilon of the Dual Minds Left_bar_bleue4900/4900Epsilon of the Dual Minds Empty_bar_bleue  (4900/4900)
Experience Points :
Epsilon of the Dual Minds Left_bar_bleue0/100Epsilon of the Dual Minds Empty_bar_bleue  (0/100)

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Post by Ixion7 October 22nd 2009, 7:16 pm

Thanks for the comments guys. Epsilon was truly an inspirational character for me so he wasn't too difficult to make.

Thank you Sara. You are a very good moderator and I think the forum will do better with you as a mod. Keep up the good work.
Ixion7
Ixion7
Elite Warrior

Male
Number of posts : 105

The BattleField
Health Points:
Epsilon of the Dual Minds Left_bar_bleue4700/4700Epsilon of the Dual Minds Empty_bar_bleue  (4700/4700)
Tsukara-Skill Points:
Epsilon of the Dual Minds Left_bar_bleue3100/3400Epsilon of the Dual Minds Empty_bar_bleue  (3100/3400)
Experience Points :
Epsilon of the Dual Minds Left_bar_bleue0/100Epsilon of the Dual Minds Empty_bar_bleue  (0/100)

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Post by Sara October 23rd 2009, 12:34 pm

T__T Thanks! I'll do my best! Very Happy
Sara
Sara
Suzaku Elite

Female
Number of posts : 200
Age : 33
Location : Darklands
Occupation : Nothing
Interests : Martial Arts; Music.

The BattleField
Health Points:
Epsilon of the Dual Minds Left_bar_bleue4000/4000Epsilon of the Dual Minds Empty_bar_bleue  (4000/4000)
Tsukara-Skill Points:
Epsilon of the Dual Minds Left_bar_bleue5000/5000Epsilon of the Dual Minds Empty_bar_bleue  (5000/5000)
Experience Points :
Epsilon of the Dual Minds Left_bar_bleue100/100Epsilon of the Dual Minds Empty_bar_bleue  (100/100)

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